Jerome Martinéz's Authorization Application

[[WB] SDS Bandy [CO] [15th]]

Player Section

Steam Name: Jack Bandy
Age: 14
How long have you been Roleplaying? (can be any game): Six years
How long have you been playing Serious GMod RP?: 4 years

Character Section

Authorization(s):
An ex-military character named Jerome Martinéz (Incoming "Couldn't survive 7 hour war xD)
Military skills e.g. Basic hand to hand, weapon training and survival tactics.
Military kevlar vest with a 9 inch knife with a saw back for cutting.


Name: Jerome Martinéz
Age: 28
Gender: Male
Affiliation: None

Write a detailed in-canon back-story how your character obtained these authorizations.
"Jerome get yo lazy ass up and get to school right now!" The shout echoed through the two bedroom house "Righto pa. I'll be down in a minute or two." Jerome lazily replied "No... You'll be up in a minute flat. I won't have my son being slow even if you have just woke up." Jerome's father replied back in a quick shout. After quickly placing on his checkered shirt and blue ripped jeans Jerome headed down to the kitchen to enjoy his breakfast.

After a quick breakfast Jerome happily grabbed his bag and walked to school. Whilst walking to school he thought to himself "So my pa is expecting me to fulfill what my family have always done, join the army. Like my grandfather and my great grandfather he wants me to join up too, and I shall. " He thought this to himself all the way to school. Arriving at the main gates Jerome realized he was 15 minutes late and so he headed straight to the gym facility. Plopping his bag down next to the weights Jerome picked up a heavy weight and tested it by holding it above his head and then carefully letting it fall to his knees and then back up, he repeated this movement with both arms many times. 14 minutes after starting, the bell rang and Jerome headed straight to first class which was math, Jerome was not the best at maths but "Hell, who is?" He thought to himself. Once arriving in the class his teacher announced to them all that they had maths twice, right now and straight after.

Jerome lazily walked out of the math class as soon as it finished with his friend Robert, Robert was Jerome's only and closest friend, and always would be til Jerome joined the forces. Even though Robert and Jerome talked a lot, Jerome still wanted to be alone so he could concentrate more, so after a hasty "I have to go be somewhere." Jerome walked straight back to his den... The Gym to lift more weights. After school Jerome decided he would take the long way home, even if that meant heading straight past the Tiffans. The Tiffans are a family of Racists that constantly roam the streets surrounding their home, and because of this Jerome is reluctant to be heading that way.

Walking down the last alley of the street Jerome noticed the man trailing after him, Jerome picked up the pace and continued walking down the alley when suddenly the bloke behind him shouted out "Ey nigger boy, what you doin' outta yo cotton field?" Jerome slowly turned around as the young Tiffan laughed "Yeah nigger boy, I asked that and I know how much you hate bein' called a nigger... Nigger." The Tiffan said the last word slower than the rest just to add more impact onto Jerome "Excuse me... I think you're Jimmy right? Jimmy Tiffan? If so, please just go home. I don't want to get in a fight." "I don't want to get in a fight." The Jimmy repeated the sentence in a high pitched voice and then he lunged for Jerome, and started punching, kicking and shouting. Fists flew and blood danced on the walls as the two exchanged hits, even though Jerome worked out he had forgot all that and just went into defend mode, allowing the Tiffan to rain down on his arms and lower body till the Tiffan tired and had to stop and then he did, with a quick moment Jerome let his guard down and started to punch Jimmy in the chest, jaw and head repeatedly. This went on until a man walked past and shouted "You! Yes you! Leave that boy alone. NOW!" Without any hesitation Jerome ran the fuck away back to his home to explain what happened.

"Jerome, fighting aint the smartest of things ok? Now then, because of this I have taken up the choice to send you to military school." Jerome was edgy when his father was speaking, the tone his dad used was both stern but calm, his mother though said nothing, she just nodded with what his father said. And after the talk Jerome retired to his room.

Trains, planes and buses were what got Jerome to his new home at Military school the place he would soon call his life and home for many years to come. He was 15 and nearly ready to join the actual army so his first few weeks were physical and mental tests, Drills and workouts, speeches from veterans and the such, shooting practice was also done weekly. The drills were tough and pushed your body to the limit, one of the drills involved you and 5 others picking up a log thighs deep in water and hoisting it above your head, then you have to hold it above your head for 5 minutes. Shooting practice was fun and also easy to adjust to "Martinéz, keep your right foot twisted to the right and keep put it behind your left foot as if walking with a bent foot, click off the safety and fire three rounds down the range." Just as the words left Sgt. Ramone's Jerome did as he was asked, adjusting his stance he aimed down the sights of the M4A1, clicked off the safety and shot three rounds down the range, one hit the target in the head and the other two hit the chest "Good shot Martinéz, keep it up." After the shooting practice came physical workouts and hand to hand. Physical involved 100 pushups then 100 sit ups then back to 100 push ups then 20 sit ups, H2H however mainly involved blocking and attack and then using the butt stock of your gun to bat your enemy away so you have room to fire off a shot or three, or maybe a clip? This was Jerome's new life and his body was getting stronger by the day. After spending a couple of years in Military School Jerome enlisted up fully and was happier than ever, and in peak physical shape also.

Several years in the military had made Jerome accustomed to poor living conditions and severe situations, he joined up in 1995 at the age of 16 and was now 19. The year was 2001 and Jerome was stationed out in Iraq. He had been there for a little while and had already been shot at whilst on many patrols, he was one of the first in his group to kill an insurgent and was, that night subjected to a drinking challenge with his friends. This was his dream, to live and breathe the army. He loved it, the training, drills, routines and the action. The rush of adrenaline was a feeling all the men there loved. That moment when you feel immortal and don't feel pain. The moment when you are with your squad and you take fire, the moment you return fire and the moment when you realize your situation and you come back to full senses. That was a craving all the men there had. The training Jerome was doing was advanced survival training and also advanced hand to hand. He was not the best of his friends at Hand to hand but he picked up some tricks and soon improved, still not the best but he was still a good fighter none the less. Whilst out on a patrol his squad was hit with an RPG shot. The shrapnel tore through the men at the front and straight after the shot a flurry of AK47's fired off. Volley after volley of bullets ripped the air apart. The sound of whizzing bullets was enough for the men to realize they had to run, and run they did. Whilst running to a ditch no more than three meters away Jerome was hit in the back of the leg by a stray AK shot. The shot ripped through his skin and bone and sent pieces of his knee cap into his squad mates in front of him. Whilst in the ditch Jerome applied as much pressure as he could to the wound as a Humvee turned up and sent .50 shots down the street. The sight of such a powerful weapon was amazing and the way that the rounds ripped the walls apart was astonishing. But Jerome was more worried about his blown out knee cap.

Many hours in surgery Jerome was sent back to America where he was treated. A knee replacement was placed in and Jerome had to learn how to use his leg without damaging it further. He spent a couple of months in hospital and two years with personal care. He spent his time adapting to his new ailment and the yearning to rejoin the Army. That can't happen now he though to himself over and over again. After many years in his one bed roomed apartment he decided he was heading out to a new place. A place of peace and serenity. So Jerome went on down to a shop with postcards and closed his eyes. He spun the card rack once and picked up card as it was spinning. On the card was a mountain village in Romania. The place had a small cave you could live in. He payed for the card and headed straight to book a plane for Romania. The mountain village was close to a farm which the locals used to farm wheat and vegetables. There was also a small river with fish in it. Fresh berries and nuts were also known to grow there. These berries were safe to eat, as were the nuts and would give you enough protein to last. Jerome walked back to his one bed roomed apartment to sift through his personal belongings, whilst looking he came across his old kevlar vest, the desert camo was still fresh and he placed it into his suitcase carefully with his other clothing and misc items whilst saying "Well, this is coming with me, and so is the knife." And then departed fir the air port. On arriving to the airport he went through all the procedures and had to go through some extra work with the knife, due to it being a lethal weapon and such, after the hassle and showing that it was safe in his bag he boarded the plane.

After arriving at Romania he got a horse drawn cart up to the small mountain village. After arriving at the village he was shown to the cave he would be living in for many years to come. The place was small enough for him to bear and he was given a tour of the village and left to his own devices. Whilst living there he started to do self reflection times where he would sit for two hours a day thinking of nothing except what he had done with his life. His knee was a big problem though when it came to coming down the mountain so he stayed up in his cave with nothing except the village people and his memories. His vest though he wore everyday just so he could remember his happiest days in the Army.

A loud bang came over head as many metal object flew out of the sky and landed in the ground. The metal things landed no where near the mountain village so Jerome left it be and stayed up in his cave for days. He later learned two days later that Earth was took over within 7 hours, gobsmacked Jerome went down the mountain to fish and noticed the emptiness. No people or fishers were out just Jerome and some of the villagers. Jerome did however go on with his life of fishing and cave dwelling mainly because he had learned the truth of what had happened as many refugees came through heading to a place called Inue valley. He did however see many things in the sky, storms of a such, explosions in the distance as cities fell and also the weird aliens that passed through the small village, they were named Xen.

The year was 2015 when the earth had fallen and now it was 2018. Jerome had spent the years since the earth fell to gather his bearing and scout around the village, many of the people fled to see their families but Jerome stayed, still wondering how the earth fell in such a short time. After many years living in the cave off of fish and fruits. Jerome was stilling residing in the cave next to the village and he saw the odd helicopter like device fly past, the people he lived with wandering off regularly and most never came back at all but Jerome went out and scouted the area around the village, what he found was a small settlement built around a ravine. There was a bridge heading to what looked like an Inn. As Jerome watched day in and day out he decided to head on down to the small town soon. He worked out whilst waiting his time and continued to eat the nuts, berries and fish. His knee was becoming no weaker or stronger and that had made him happy, knowing his knee was not going to fuck up on him on his climb down.


What will these authorizations give your character in regards to perks or defects?
Perks
An ex-military character named Jerome Martinéz;
This will enable me to RP as an ex-soldier. You will think that this will be like "I am an ex soldier so take me in and I will fight for you yada bladah" But it won't. It'll go more along the lines of "I have seen many things but I don't want any trouble. I only wish to live and work."

Fake Knee
The knee itself can be used to deliver brute force and also if someone tries to stab it the blade will only get stuck in the fake body part.

Military skills e.g. Basic hand to hand, weapon training and survival tactics.
These skills will be what he will need to survive in the harsh areas of the valley. The military training alone will have pushed him hard so he will be able to take a bit of punishment. But not too much as that would be over powered. The survival tactics will allow him to basically be able to make filters, shelter, fire, what is safe and not safe to eat, how to make small bath out of a running river/lake.

Military kevlar vest with a standard issue knife.
The vest will provide protection against the odd 9mm bullet at a medium range, at short it would still have force behind it. also some melee weapons. The knife will be a way of gutting the fish he catches and a tool to use against people if they try to kill him.

Defects
Hardly socializing
The fact that he has lived in the mountains for so long will go against him as the only people he lived around spoke hardly any English so he will be talking with the first English speaking people in a long time. It will also be hard to socialize again after being out of society for so long.

Fake knee
This will be a problem when doing long distance running and climbing. He can climb yes, but not for a long period of time. The knee also plays up sometimes causing him to have to sit down.

The Vest
Vest: Well, people will want a kevlar vest for more safety and comfort. It will also make him stand out as it is a desert camo one.

What do you plan to do with these perks/defects?
I plan to RP as an ex-soldier as I have seen no one RP as this before.
It'll also be fun to have to RP out the injury on Jerome's knee, having to deal with that will be a tricky one and also a fun part as I can also start talking with people with medical skills.

Will anyone else need these auths? (If so, list OOC and IC name(s))
Nope.

Which server does this apply for?
Outlands

Extra Notes (optional):
I do take all of what you say into mind. If you think this is stupid (Wich I can tell most of you will) I don't mind. I'm taking a long shot in doing this.

[hogs]

Write a detailed in-canon back-story how your character obtained these authorizations.
"Jerome get yo lazy ass up and get to school right now!" The shout echoed through the two bedroom house "Righto pa. I'll be down in a minute or two." Jerome lazily replied "No... You'll be up in a minute flat. I won't have my son being slow even if you have just woke up." Jerome's father replied back in a quick shout. After quickly placing on his checkered shirt and blue ripped jeans Jerome headed down to the kitchen to enjoy his breakfast.

After a quick breakfast Jerome happily grabbed his bag and walked to school. Whilst walking to school he though to himself "So my pa wants me to join the army when I get older. Being that I'm 15 now, I'll be in the army soon enough!" - Where did this come from? It had no build-up or anything, just him stating that 'my dad wants me to join the army'. - He though this to himself all the way to school. Arriving at the main gates Jerome realized he was 15 minutes late and so he headed straight to the gym facility. Plopping his bag down next to the weights Jerome picked up a heavy weight and tested it by holding it above his head and then carefully letting it fall to his knees and then back up. He repeated this movement with both arms many times. 14 minutes after starting, the bell rang and Jerome headed straight to first class which was math. Jerome was not the best at maths but "Hell, who is?" He though to himself. Once arriving in the class his teacher announced to them all that they had maths twice. Right now and straight after.

Not a great start, your grammar is horrible and you cannot seem to spell 'thought' properly - nor can you seem to use commas, just an excessive amount of full-stops.

Jerome lazily walked out of the math class as soon as it finished with his friend Robert. Robert was Jerome's only and closest friend, and always would be til Jerome joined the forces. Even though Robert and Jerome talked a lot, Jerome still wanted to be alone so he could concentrate more. So after a hasty "I have to go be somewhere." Jerome walked straight back to his den... The Gym to lift more weights. - More excessive use of full-stops. After school Jerome decided he would take the long way home, even if that meant heading straight past the Tiffans. - No build up to what the 'Tiffans' is yet again.

Walking down the last alley of the street Jerome noticed the man trailing after him. Jerome picked up the pace and continued walking down the alley when suddenly the bloke behind him shouted out "Ey nigger boy. What you doin' outta yo cotton field?" Jerome slowly turned around as the young Tiffan laughed "Yeah nigger boy, I asked that and I know how much you hate bein' called a nigger... Nigger." The Tiffan said the last word slower than the rest just to add more impact onto Jerome. "Excuse me... I think you're Jimmy right? Jimmy Tiffan? If so, please just go home. I don't want to get in a fight." "I don't want to get in a fight." The Jimmy repeated the sentence in a high pitched voice and then he lunged. - 'he lunged.' Really? Make a lunge: "the guests lunged at the food" I'm fairly certain that the back-story has to be detailed, which this is not. - Fists flew and blood danced on the walls as the two exchanged fists. Even though Jerome worked out he had forgot all that and just went into defend mode, allowing the Tiffan to rain down on his arms and lower body till he tired and had to stop and then he did, with a quick moment Jerome let his guard down and started to punch Jimmy in the chest, jaw and head repeatedly. This went on until a man walked past and shouted "You! Yes you! Leave that boy alone now!" Without any hesitation Jerome ran the fuck away back to his home to explain what happened.

"YOU GOT IN A FIGHT YOU FOOL! YOU'RE GOING TO MILITARY SCHOOL NOW!" - I don't even know what to say to this. - Jerome's father was in such a rage that he didn't react for 10 minutes after Jerome had finished explaining. The silence was awkward till Jerome's father unleashed the beast - I can't tell if the beast is referring to his penis or not, seriously. It's detail is lacking that much. - and started shouting. Jerome's mother however was crying about how her son was a thug and would accomplish nothing, - But wasn't he the one who got beaten up? - saying how he is going to Military school till he learned hit lesson.

Trains, planes and buses were what got Jerome to his new home at Military school. This place would soon become Jerome's life and home for many years to come. He was 15 and nearly ready to join the actual army so his first few weeks were physical and mental tests. Drills and workouts, speeches from veterans and the such. Shooting practice was also done weekly. After spending several years there Jerome enlisted.

Several years in the military had made Jerome accustomed to poor living conditions and severe situations. He joined up in 1995 at the age of 16 and was now 19. The year was 2001 and Jerome was stationed out in Iraq. He had been there for a little while and had already been shot at whilst on many patrols. He was one of the first in his group to kill an insurgent and was, that night subjected to a drinking challenge with his friends. This was his dream, to live and breathe the army. He loved it, the training, drills, routines and the action. The rush of adrenaline was a feeling all the men there loved. That moment when you feel immortal and don't feel pain. The moment when you are with your squad and you take fire, the moment you return fire and the moment when you realize your situation and you come back to full senses. That was a craving all the men there had. The training Jerome was doing was advanced survival training and also advanced hand to hand. He was not the best at Hand to hand - Then why would he be learning 'advanced' hand-to-hand combat? - but he picked up some tricks and soon improved. Still not the best but he was still a good fighter none the less. Whilst out on a patrol his squad was hit with an RPG shot. The shrapnel tore through the men at the front and straight after the shot a flurry of AK47's fired off. Volley after volley of bullets ripped the air apart. The sound of whizzing bullets was enough for the men to realize they had to run, and run they did. Whilst running to a ditch no more than three meters away Jerome was hit in the knee by a stray AK shot. - But he couldn't of been hit in the knee if he was running away and not directly at them. - The shot ripped through his skin and bone and sent pieces of his knee into his squad mates in front of him. - I don't have words for this. That is genuinely retarded. - Whilst in the ditch Jerome applied as much pressure as he could to the wound as a Humvee turned up and sent .50 shots down the street. The sight of such a powerful weapon was amazing and the way that the rounds ripped the walls apart was astonishing. But Jerome was more worried about his blown out knee cap.

Many hours in surgery Jerome was sent back to America where he was treated. A knee replacement was placed in and Jerome had to learn how to use his leg without damaging it further. He spent a year in hospital and two years with personal care. - Why would you spend a year in hospital and 2 in care by getting shot in the knee? - He spent his time adapting to his new ailment and the yearning to rejoin the Army. That can't happen now he though to himself over and over again. After many years in his one bed roomed apartment he decided he was heading out to a new place. A place of peace and serenity. So Jerome went on down to a shop with postcards and closed his eyes. He spun the card rack once and picked up card as it was spinning. On the card was a mountain village in Romania. The place had a small cave you could live in. He payed for the card and headed straight to book a plane for Romania. The mountain village was close to a farm which the locals used to farm wheat and vegetables. There was also a small river with fish in it. Fresh berries and nuts were also known to grow there. These berries were safe to eat, as were the nuts and would give you enough protein to last. After finishing up on selling his items Jerome picked up his old US Army vest and checked the kevlar "Well, this is coming with me." He said out aloud and so he put it in his suitcase, along with his knife - How he would be able to get a 9 inch saw back knife through customs is absolutely beyond me. - and headed to the air port. On arriving to the airport he went through all the procedures and proceeded to walk onto the plane. He say next to the window with a nice couple who he talked to for a little. Slowly, as the plane started to rise Jerome thought to himself "Time for a new life."

After arriving at Romania he got a horse drawn cart up to the small mountain village. After arriving at the village he was shown to the cave he would be living in for many years to come. The place was small enough for him to bear and he was given a tour of the village and left to his own devices. Whilst living there he started to do self reflection times where he would sit for two hours a day thinking of nothing except what he had done with his life. His knee was a big problem though when it came to coming down the mountain so he stayed up in his cave with nothing except the village people and his memories. His vest though he wore everyday just so he could remember his happiest days in the Army.

A loud bang came over head as many metal object flew out of the sky and landed in the ground. The metal things landed no where near the mountain village so Jerome left it be and stayed up in his cave for days. He later learned two days later that Earth was took over within 7 hours, gobsmacked Jerome went down the mountain to fish and noticed the emptiness. No people or fishers were out just Jerome and some of the villagers. Jerome did however go on with his life of fishing and cave dwelling mainly because he had learned the truth of what had happened as many refugees came through heading to a place called Inue valley.

YEAH BECAUSE HE TOTALLY WOULDN'T OF NOTICED THE XEN ALIENS OR PORTAL STORMS OR EXPLOSIONS OR ANYTHING

The year was 2015 when the earth had fallen and now it was 2018. - How did he survive for this long? You never detailed that. - Jerome was stilling residing in the cave next to the village and he saw the odd helicopter like device fly past. The people he lived with soon started wandering out and some didn't come back at all but Jerome went out and scouted the area around the village. What he found was a small settlement built around a ravine. There was a bridge heading to what looked like an Inn. As Jerome watched day in and day out he decided to head on down to the small town soon. He worked out whilst waiting his time and continued to eat the nuts, berries and fish. His knee was becoming no weaker or stronger and that had made him happy, knowing his knee was not going to fuck up on him on his climb down.

What will these authorizations give your character in regards to perks or defects?
Perks
An ex-military character named Jerome Martinéz;
This will enable me to RP as a soldier. You will think that this will be like "I am an ex soldier so take me in and I will fight for you yada bladah" But it won't. It'll go more along the lines of "I have seen many things but I don't want any trouble. I only wish to live and work."

But you clearly stated you want to RP with him as 'a soldier.'

Military skills e.g. Basic hand to hand, weapon training and survival tactics.
These skills will be what he will need to survive in the harsh areas of the valley. The military training alone will have pushed him hard so he will be able to take a bit of punishment. But not too much as that would be over powered. The survival tactics will allow him to basically be able to make filters and stuff along those lines. (To drink water)

But anybody can make 'filters'. You haven't detailed any of the infinitely large sum of perks that are able to be used from this authorization.

Military kevlar vest with a standard issue knife.
The vest will provide light protection against the odd 9mm bullet at a fair and also some melee weapons. The knife will be a way of gutting the fish he catches and a tool to use against people if they try to kill him.

At a fair what?
You clearly haven't though this through seeing as I pointed out how you can't possibly get a 9 inch saw-back knife through airport security.

Defects
An ex-military character named Jerome Martinéz;
If the OTA ever get a hold of him he will be shot without any hesitation, even if they have their new thing up. There maybe people in the valley who hate soldiers and blame them for the Combine taking over.
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Being a member of the OTA myself, I can tell you that the OTA wouldn't 'shoot without any hesitation' just because you're ex-military, how would we even know how? Think up of better defects.

Fake knee
This will be a problem when doing long distance running and climbing. He can climb yes, but not for a long period of time. The knee also plays up sometimes causing him to have to sit down.

And the perks of the knee are...?

Un-sociable
As he has spent the majority of his time in the cave he has become skeptical of the people he meets. This will prove to be a problem if he gets confronted.

Un-sociable isn't a fucking word and nor is it an authorization you've applied for.

The knife and vest.
Knife: Some people may take it as a threat and try to kill Jerome for it. He will also have to sharpen it regularly with wets stone from the ravine.
Vest: Well, people will want a kevlar vest for more safety and comfort. It will also make him stand out as it is a desert camo one.

'with wets stone from the ravine'
Do I really have to make a comment on this? I really don't want to. That's not a fucking defect, and it never will be. Some people 'may' take it as a threat, but only if he acts threateningly with it. Did you learn nothing from Jack 'Greasy' Bandy's authorization application?

What do you plan to do with these perks/defects?
.The soldier aspect makes him a target to some but will also keep him safe with the training.
.The knife is a tool and a weapon but also a defect. It also makes Jerome feel sage.
.The vest is another form of protection.

That didn't answer the original question, Jesus fucking Christ.

I do take all of what you say into mind. If you think this is stupid (Wich I can tell most of you will) I don't mind. I'm taking a long shot in doing this.

Hell yes I think this is fucking stupid. You clearly haven't learned anything from your past application, you have next to no role-play capability, your grammar and punctuation is very poor and I found it very hard to read, you've contradicted yourself multiple times in the application, and you cannot be trusted with an authorization of this magnitude.

And on a side note, 'many years' isn't an exact number.


Please, think about what you're writing before you post it - for fucks sake.

<a href="https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Afr6I74ms9k" target="_blank">https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Afr6I74ms9k</a>

[[WB] SDS Bandy [CO] [15th]]

Edited to the best I can do at the moment and please do give me feedback.

[hogs]

Edited to the best I can do at the moment and please do give me feedback.

but you haven't changed the backstory

[[WB] SDS Bandy [CO] [15th]]

I changed some of it unless you want to go through it with a fine toothed comb and point out the major flaws, then I can fix it up properly.

[hogs]

After finishing up on selling his items Jerome picked up his old US Army vest and checked the kevlar "Well, this is coming with me." He said out aloud and so he put it in his suitcase, along with his knife and headed to the air port.

lol?

[[WB] SDS Bandy [CO] [15th]]

Righto, changed it around. He aint sold shit, he was sifting around his old belongings and threw the vest in with his clothes.

[garry :D]

Trains, planes and buses were what got Jerome to his new home at Military school the place he would soon call his life and home for many years to come. He was 15 and nearly ready to join the actual army so his first few weeks were physical and mental tests, Drills and workouts, speeches from veterans and the such, shooting practice was also done weekly, and after spending several years there Jerome enlisted.

Two sentences does not constitute an explanation for knowledge of military tactics/procedures/drills. More details is needed here before I can give my support.

[hogs]

Righto, changed it around. He aint sold shit, he was sifting around his old belongings and threw the vest in with his clothes.

still not seeing a real difference apart from rewording the same statement

and you do not have any support from me and i don't want to see you getting this character because you clearly can't be trusted with it regardless of how much you change it. it's terrible.

[[WB] SDS Bandy [CO] [15th]]

Well Hogs, every person to their own opinion.

I edited the training part by the way if that is any concern.

[Doctor Nice roButt]

 "Jerome was not the best at maths"
"them all that they had maths twice"
Maths?

"they were named Xen."
How would he know they were called Xen?

Anyway, in all seriousness, the authorization application is mediocre at best. You have no sense of grammar at all. I see a lack of commas or too many for one sentence.
You also put that he joined the military in 1995, saying he was 16. In the character section of the application, you say he's 27. But if he was 16 in 1995 and it is now 2018, he would be 39.
It would also be nice to see some sort of mention of PTSD. Most people in the military suffer it after their service, especially if they've suffered some sort of horrific injury or witnessed squad mates died. your character experienced both, so...

I honestly can't give me support for this application. Hogs pointed out so valid points, and, after seeing your RP, I don't think you can handle it.

- support from me.

[Dallas]

Spoiler for Hiden:

All the points raised are completely valid. I won't support this application. Sorry but you really need to make this far more detailed- I don't even think you even mentioned which branch he joined...

[Khub]

Well Hogs, every person to their own opinion.

All the points hogs raised up are valid. You'll need to fix them, unless you want to have this application denied.

[Reaver]

It'd be silly for me to point out errors that have already been stated above.
For those reasons, I don't support this either. The application itself seemed rushed as well.
-soup art from me. Sorry, mate.

[The Mysterious Stranger]

 Most of the people above stated the reasons why it was a bad authorization application and I think it is too since I agree with them aswell. Apologies but I am going to have to -support on this one.