Couple things before I do the whole + - stuff.-What do you mean up by next update?-There were no OTA in the War but then again it could be one of the SYNTH Soldiers used in the invasion.-Work on your dialogue, there needs to be a new line for each new speaker.-Perhaps make it past tense as present tense is rather jarring to read.Once these issues are fixed, I see no problem supporting this application.
As long as she acts like a child its fine. Even though you're SA, I'll still bitch at you if she turns out unrealistically badass.