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Kyle Fendi's Authorization Application
« on: December 18, 2011, 01:27:59 AM »
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Steam Name: || BBI || Joe
Age: 13
How long have you been Roleplaying? (can be any game): Well I would say like 2 years.
How long have you been playing Serious GMod RP?: One year and like 10 months.

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Authorization(s):
Knowledge of becoming a criminal profiler, and knowing how to do basic therapy, to gain knowledge of anti citizens.

Name: Kyle Fendi
Age: 30
Gender: Male
Affiliation: None

Write a detailed in-canon back-story how your character obtained these authorizations.
     Kyle Fendi, an old detective was once named DR.Kyle Fendi. He was in a special division, in the CIA and after  five whole years of solving homocides, and kidnappings, his division was disbanded. Kyle Fendi was left behind and became a petty, detective for the police force and after that ended up quiting. Luckily after he quited two months later, the portal storms occured, and about a year later the war occured.
     Kyle, loosing all his defenses, like guns, was easily over powered and captured by weird men in masks, which his friends called Combine. Kyle worked for about two years, and after two years was transported city to city. Kyle drinking breens water constantly, did not even know the constant traveling and therefore, was not effected by traveling. How ever, while in city 18, Kyle started to remember his past life, because of having a flash back of his job, while he was knocked out. He remembered his job, because it was the largest sum of his life and the best part of his life.
     Kyle is now in City 45 and still grasps the knowledge of therapy and talks to citizens, and had certain interactions with anti- citiziens, in which he found how the normal anti citizen, talks, thinks, walks, and acts in public. He will use this to be loyal to the union and find out where the resistance is hiding, and which entrances will be used to stop them. He knows sector six from a previous life of hide and seek, and after seeing the benefits of the union, he decided to cooperate. He has already, twelve loyalist points, an armband, and preservence to join the Combine Civil Authority.


What will these authorizations give your character in regards to perks or defects?
Perks
Ability to know how to locate an anti citizen, and how to know how to over power an anti-ctizien or trick one.

Defects
The ability to be wrong, miscalucate where the anti citizen will be.

What do you plan to do with these perks/defects?
I will be loyal to the union, and help locate anti citizens.

Will anyone else need these auths? (If so, list OOC and IC name(s))
No.

Which server does this apply for?
City

Extra Notes (optional):
« Last Edit: December 18, 2011, 11:01:10 AM by ll BBI ll Joe »

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Re: Kyle Fendi's Authorization Application
« Reply #1 on: December 23, 2011, 04:19:59 AM »
Your backstory is a little short and iffy, but we will evaluate your rp skills.(Admins, post what you think of him.)
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Re: Kyle Fendi's Authorization Application
« Reply #2 on: December 23, 2011, 04:36:51 AM »
Application denied for:

1. Major and numerous grammatical and prose errors.
2. Numerous plot holes and canon oversights in the backstory.
3. Perks and defects insufficiently detailed.
« Last Edit: June 03, 2012, 04:21:42 AM by Kom??Як »
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