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Ravenhole: Resurction. A Prequel to Half Life 2
« on: October 27, 2012, 07:47:33 PM »
Once upon in time there were humens and analmals in ravenhole, the sky was happy and full off hop, in ravenhole there was a man called bob grigori he was a nice man and worked in an church in the middle off city off ravenhole. all was good that day but then the cobmines invaded and staerted killing all the humens in city off ravenhole, the cobmines killed with headgarbs that flew down in rockets and landed in bobs room bob then took out his wepon and shot the headgarbs bob then saw his wife and rest of family were evil headgarb zombies
"YOU WILL BE ONE OF US BOB!"
Shouted the evil zombie headgarbs bob then shots the evil family zombies in the face but sadly because he didnt want to then he ran outside and saw the cobmines had taken all of earth and the humens were sad bob let cry fall from his face as he shouted but quiet cus the evil cubmines were looking for humens and evil zombies to shot at, bob then saw the cumbin tower that went up in clouds and sparked with sparks cumbiens were flying around the sky and on the ground with stridars and picture bots bob gregori looked at them and got mad and picked up a riffle from the ground he then said
"Dam yu cobmine i am going back to ravenhole to help humens and give pepple hop!" the cobmine tower laughed and said "haha bob gregori" bob then went back to ravenhole and found that everyone was evel zombie headgarbs bob then vowwed to kill them all and get revenge on the cumbiens for killing the humens and analmals. "THIS ISNT OVER!!!11!" bob gregori shouted at top of voice.

By, a fucking idiot named Dalas


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Reaver you should have known, that this... Poorly written history, sorry to say, would belong in spam instead of in creations.
I'll go ahead and give you a 10% warning for doing such, as you already know the rules.
10% warning issued ~Challenge.
« Last Edit: October 29, 2012, 09:06:29 AM by Challenge of death sex?3 »
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Re: Ravenhole: Resurction. A Prequel to Half Life 2
« Reply #1 on: October 27, 2012, 08:06:43 PM »
<a href="https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oNvFPKujc5w" target="_blank">https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oNvFPKujc5w</a>

very sad memorising story
rip bob

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Re: Ravenhole: Resurction. A Prequel to Half Life 2
« Reply #2 on: October 27, 2012, 08:08:31 PM »
my work has now been realized, thank you

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Re: Ravenhole: Resurction. A Prequel to Half Life 2
« Reply #3 on: October 27, 2012, 09:13:15 PM »


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>Fats Mcgee. And his Retard Three.

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Re: Ravenhole: Resurction. A Prequel to Half Life 2
« Reply #4 on: October 28, 2012, 04:07:56 PM »
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Re: Ravenhole: Resurction. A Prequel to Half Life 2
« Reply #5 on: October 28, 2012, 08:30:16 PM »
I appreciate the effort but there are a lot of grammatical and spelling errors in this piece. The story doesn't particularly flow very well and the choice as well as placement of the vocabulary only reinforces this. You might want to tidy it up a bit since there are a lot of mistakes before you think about continuing it.

 

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