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[DENIED]Lilly Helgon's Civil Authority Application
« on: April 14, 2012, 02:10:06 AM »
Lilly Helgon's Civil Authority Application

OOC Name: ????X/G|??????M§D???Th??I???N

IC Character Name: Lilly Helgon

1) Please write a minimum of 3 paragraphs OOC'ly detailing why your character wishes to join the Combine Civil Authority and what lead your character to do so.
Lilly Helgon, ever since she was put in the city she has been scared of rebellion. She has been exploring combine technology, admiring what they have made. She has always followed all orders of any unit, and given help in any way she can. Whether it be feeding or giving tips about City45.

She has kept her criminal record to a minimal, helping the combine by reporting all anti-citizen behaviour. She has always felt a need for further justice within the city.When she was the age of 22, she thought about helping to stop crime by joining the civil protection.She slowly grew a lust for justice.

She has been trying to keep citizens from disrespecting officers and letting them do their job. As the years past, her lust for justice grew stronger.She offered help to all officers, trying to be like them any way she could without getting in the officers way.She has always has always had a lust for power and justice, but it was only recently that she became seriouse about it.

2) Please detail your characters traits. (Eg, Pure, Lawful, Trustworthy)
Average Strength,Lawful,Mentally Advantaged,Straight Posture,Trustworthy,Listens well

3) Please provide 2 paragraphs about what you are expecting the Combine Civil Authority to be like for you and your character.
I expect that the Civil Protection squad will be hard work in training, but she will pull through and avoid every obstacle to bring justice to those who rebel. I will train hard and follow all her orders, no matter what. I expect it to be great, to finally complete my quest for justice. Aswell as help innocents. It shall be a long and painful journey, but worth it.

I believe that I will train hard and grow stronger, enforcing laws to citizens and punishing those who do not abide. I think that it will be a big opportunity for me, and the citizens of the city.She will patrol as much as she can and work as hard as she can. Whether it is morning, afternoon or night she will be there for the squad. To help all in need and to discourage all in regret.

4) Please provide a detailed back-story from an out-of-character perspective on your applying character. This section must be detailed and consist of a minimum of 300 words.
Lilly Helgon has been a law abiding character that often walks around observing every letter, every item, every person she encounters. She tries to avoid contact or a conversation with anyone, and tries to stay as far away as possible from anyone. Her parents gave birth to her 23 years before the 7 hour war. She was born in a town called "Levividia" and was raised their untill the age of 4, in which she had to move to a new town. She moved to a town called "Anilia" and she finished her primary school years. She did not have any friends in primary, she preffered to sit down alone. Some said she was mental, but she does disliked others in the school greatly.. She was one of the smarter children in school. She often got harder work then the other students. She was put up two two grades in school, and she was still smarter then most of the students, but she was average in mathematics and spelling. The school was small, with less then fourty-five children. As she went into high school, she grew very shy, as the highschool had more then one-hundred-and-fifty students in it. She had but one friend out of all those students, but she barely talked in person. In high school she was struggling in some classes. As the years past in high school her grades slowly rised.She studied mainly in the human body, mathematics, and electronics in high school. At the age of 14 she moved away from her parents to live with a friend, still in the same town. She lost her friend, and grew lonely as the years past. She never talked to anyone, not even her parents. Her time was going into her tests. As she sat their, rocking on her chair, she thought to herself everyday, "?????. ?????-????. ??????" engraved into a stone. She had no idea what it ment...But when she finally found out, it came true. (It means Nothing. Ever. Alone.) She went to UNE for three years straight. She spent most of her time doing her PHD, but studied further into biology, and the human body. She finished school when she was 16. When she had spent her two years on biology and human body, she spent more time working in electronics for a year. She greatly improved in all her subjects that she studied, and finished two years early. She grew dark, and confused inside. She always sat there, watching everyone who walked past her window. She would sit there in her free time thinking about something strange. It was a blur in her mind, she could not see it, she didn't know anything about it. Her fingers scratched against the handles of the chair as she thought about it. All she could think of was that. She sat there day and night, then she found out what it was. She immediatly moved out of her friends house. By now she was at the age of 18. She left her house with $1000 from her parents. She was able to live in a house for a few weeks. She got a high-payed job as a nurse, just before she was going to evicted. She talked through microphone in a plain, white room. With nothing but a microphone, chair, and some screens. Her job was high paying. She told the surgents what to do when operation, and pointed out mistakes. When she was 23, she quit her job and lived an ordinary life without work. She was quite successful from her many years of work, but then the 7-hour war came. Her parents were killed and she was dragged from her house. As the combine moved in, they killed her dog. She tried to hide, but the combine kicked and dragged her, screaming out of her room. She was put through many things. Taken to many places. As she watched from her escort away from her home, all she saw was fire. All she heard was screaming and gunshots, all she smelt was death. She was put through strange tests, and they took her to see a strange combine. Not like the others, it was different...Then an explosion forced the door open. She was being dragged as she watched the combine fire at the men who came in through the door. She was interrogated many times about what she saw at that moment, she was tortured. When they finally gave up on her, they hit her head with a dark, grey, gun. She then woke up on a train. The train ride stopped at many places, it was days before she arrived at city 45. She was scared of the combine, and tried to stay out of their way, aswell as everyone elses. She slowly grew less fearfull of the combine, feeling a place of belonging. She sometimes tried to talk to a few units, but she never got a responce. Her spine got damaged from a interrogation she went through, in which she had to hide as much as she could to avoid being killed. But after a few months, she recovered. She started to want to become a civil protection unit,though didn't want to beat up innocent people, but she soon thought to herself "The rebels do more damage to the innocents then the CCA" Then she began her journey on gathering information for the civil protection, and soon began helping them, then she finally applied. When she first came she thought that the combine were bad, but they were earths benefacturers for earth, so she slowly got less scared and felt a belonging.

5) Have you ever had a CCA character here at Catalyst Gaming?  If so, explain why it was removed.
No


OOC Details

1. How long have you played on role-playing servers in general?
Around 15 months.

2. How long have you played on serious servers?
9 Months

3. How long have you played on Catalyst Gaming?
6 months.

4. What Time zone are you in?
+10GMT

5. In what country do you live?
Australia

6. How old are you?
11

7. What�s your most memorable quality RP experience?
My most memorable moment that sticks out is when I discovered what seriouse RP is, where you build up your character and meet new people. It ended up as me being a slave being shot by a sniper, but it was great.

8. Do you consider yourself a good listener?
Yes



IC Section

Full Name: Lilly Helgon
CID: 88699
Age: 24
Gender: Female
Height: 5'3
Hair Colour Black
Eye Colour: Blue
Sexual Orientation: Straight
Weight: 109 lbs (Very Mal-Nourished)
Mental Distinctions: Healthy, fast thinking.
Mental Defects: Easily Distracted. Gets very shy. Likes to be alone. Gets stressed around lots of people.
Mental Advantages: Observant,High Mental Strength,,Quick thinking,Mature.
Notable Qualities: Good Listener, Endurant,Commited,Agile,Fast thinking.


1. Have you ever been detained or apprehended for a Sociostability Infringement before? If so, explain?
Found Level 2 and 3 contraband, and dropped it on the nexus steps. I was then put it detainment for possesion of contraband.

2. Do you regularly eat Combine Civil Authority Issued Rations?
Yes

3. Are you willing to give your life to the cause of the Universal Union?
Yes

4. Do you as a Citizen and future Civil Protection Member accept ALL actions performed by you and those under your command as your OWN responsibility?
Yes

5. Will you remain loyal and faithful to the Universal Union as long as you live?
Yes

6. Why do you want to join the Combine Civil Authority?
To bring further justice to the citizens of city 45, and to be apart of something that can help me stay strong and be commited to.


Please sign the attached oath using only blue or black pen.

I, Lilly Helgon hereby swear my mind, body and soul to the Universal Union forever so long as I draw breath. I do so knowing that my actions will be held accountable to me and solely myself. I also declare my knowledge that as a Member of The Universal Union that I will be required to perform tasks above and beyond as well as perform ANY task ordered to by ANY commanding person(s). I hereby acknowledge the fact that as a Civil Protection Task-force Unit that I will be losing most, if not all, communication and or past relationship with anyone outside of the Universal Union's operational bounds.
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Re: Lilly Helgon's Civil Authority Application
« Reply #1 on: April 16, 2012, 05:27:28 PM »
EDIT1: Added some more detail to back story
EDIT2:Deleted part of the backstory
EDIT3:Replaced parts of the backstory, and remove part of the IC section.

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Re: Lilly Helgon's Civil Authority Application
« Reply #2 on: April 18, 2012, 04:00:22 AM »
UNIT: 604
DIVISION: VICE
CLEARANCE: OfC
Enter Password: ************

ACCESS GRANTED

Connecting to Network
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CONNECTION ESTABLISHED

Applicant File Opened: <Lilly Helgon>
Citizen Identification Number: 88699

Acceptance status:
<::|| DENIED ||::>

Reason:
<::|| Application fails to follow proper spelling and grammar requirements.  Application question C6 does not meet minimum standards.

Keeping in mind your age, your application is impressive - However, somewhat more is expected for a prepared work. You need to include spacing in your back story. At the moment, it's a large block of text.
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Saving Record...
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File Saved

Disconnecting <CCA.C45.VICE-OfC.604>
Console Shut Down.
CONNECTION LOST
C45.CCA.GRID-DvL.604 - Healthy - Executing citizens. Tally: 4
John Gatsby - Healthy - Celebrating, having detonated an explosive melon in front of two CA's

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Cutlass, Sail and Cannon:
Ernest Cumberbatch, Port Royal, Governor. Governing.
John Gatsby, of the brigantine Brimstone. Amputating Limbs

 

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